ext_10273 ([identity profile] rogueslayer452.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] tiptoe39 2008-01-30 02:37 am (UTC)

Oh, I liked this introduction. You gave a nice beginning, between the parental jealousy and the sniping back and forth between each other to them just having a casual conversation for the first time since living together. I liked that whole section, of both Matt and Mohinder just talking rather than bickering. I also liked Matt's reactions to Mohinder, noticing his long eyelashes and watching his hands. It's so cute, even when he doesn't realize that yeah, he's having a beginning crush on this man. And vice versa, too. I quite liked that Mohinder asked Matt to stay just so he wouldn't be alone. That was sweet and opened up more to what could be between them.

Again, you captured both Mohinder and Matt in their realm, particularly at this moment where Mohinder has to got to California and where Matt has to deal with the advancement of his abilities and the incident in Texas. I can't wait to read the upcoming parts. I have a feeling this is going to be another amazing story, based on this prologue alone.

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