Hey baby... of course you can give me criticism. And you're not the first person to mention the language. I stand by the words I wrote, though, and I think that they work with the sort of story I'm trying to tell. I think it also has to do with what kind of stories you're used to reading and telling. I might be a tad overeducated ;D

I thank you for it, and it's certainly something to keep in mind as I edit from here on out :) *smishes*

And I'm so glad the story overall works for you!